Now it's time to condemn the company's AuthorHouse imprint for producing an awful press release -- for which the author probably paid $399. The AuthorHouse website says its releases are "professionally written." Amateurs can do better.
New Book Tells Man’s Struggle Leaving Life of War [How does a book tell a struggle? Wouldn't it tell "about" or "of" a struggle?]
Author tells story of soldier’s fight to escape his past and start a new life through God
Oftentimes [Wasn't that word retired around 1880?] when a boy becomes a soldier, it is a lifestyle change that he cannot escape. [Of course.] In the new fiction [comma] White Lion [Should be in italics.] (published by AuthorHouse) [comma] Walter Williams tells a story about one man’s [hackneyed phrase] struggle though life after Vietnam.
The story takes him from being a young boy in the country to being drafted into the Army at 18 to fight in the Vietnam War, and training to become a sniper. The book details his training and highlights the extreme emotions he encountered during the fight. [HUH? Which fight?] The war imbued him with a kill-or-be-killed lifestyle. [More likely an attitude than a lifestyle]
His experiences haunted him for the rest of his life, [hackneyed phrase] especially the loss of his best friend in combat, who died protecting him. [horrible!!! sentence] Coming home from the war, he is [was] shocked at the public’s reaction when some call [called] him a baby killer, spitting on him for doing his duty.
Next it was my [WTF? How did we get from third person to first person? Where was the editor?] turn. I told my story and when asked if I had any remorse for my actions, I said [comma, then quote marks] yes, as a trained soldier, I was embarrassed that I lost control of my emotions. [end quote] For these two men [Huh? Which two men?] to make a mockery of me and the soldiers I have [unnecessary word, distorts tense] served with [comma] was simply more than I could take. I was not only defending my honor [comma] but that of my men [was he a general?] [comma] as well. I was sorry for what I did to these two men [comma] however they need to accept some of the responsibility for their actions [comma] as well.
He [Who's he?] becomes [became] even closer with his friend’s family as they introduce [introduced] him to God [Where did they meet?] – but he is [was] skeptical and resists [resisted] . Instead, he feels [felt that] the only thing he is good at is killing, turning to a life as a mercenary for three years, serving in South America, Southeast Asia and Africa.